sooo close ... bt yet so far
i really wish ... i hd a car
i m nt alwyz dis ...
... y do some guyz sit nd piss ??
y do ppl get .. offended ?
ven .. thy r nt da 1 bein contended
i aint no shaddy cynic ...
... cribbn bout lyf nd its gimmic
i too tend 2 smile ...
... nd nt sulk ovr my poignant pile
i write .. ven i m sad
dis tym, tryn my hand ... on bein glad
i'm happy .. i'm filld wid joy
.. m no longer da 4 yr old boy
've stepped out of my cribb ..
.. nt shwn ny sign of jibb
disz da new me ... disz da new guy
tryn 2 match my new shirt wid da old tie ..
i m da big darn dark knight
flyin da kite .. in dis stormy night
goshh .. its soo hard 2 rhyme smthn wid happy
all my skeptic senses, cum up wid is ... crappy
cant go longer den dis ...
my gloomy aura .. is all i miss
lemme dish dis out ..
.. widout 'vin 2 choke one out
lyf aint no bitch ... no galz a witch
.. whoz da damn snitch ??
dat i shd freakn ditch ...
i really wish ... i hd a car
i m nt alwyz dis ...
... y do some guyz sit nd piss ??
y do ppl get .. offended ?
ven .. thy r nt da 1 bein contended
i aint no shaddy cynic ...
... cribbn bout lyf nd its gimmic
i too tend 2 smile ...
... nd nt sulk ovr my poignant pile
i write .. ven i m sad
dis tym, tryn my hand ... on bein glad
i'm happy .. i'm filld wid joy
.. m no longer da 4 yr old boy
've stepped out of my cribb ..
.. nt shwn ny sign of jibb
disz da new me ... disz da new guy
tryn 2 match my new shirt wid da old tie ..
i m da big darn dark knight
flyin da kite .. in dis stormy night
goshh .. its soo hard 2 rhyme smthn wid happy
all my skeptic senses, cum up wid is ... crappy
cant go longer den dis ...
my gloomy aura .. is all i miss
lemme dish dis out ..
.. widout 'vin 2 choke one out
lyf aint no bitch ... no galz a witch
.. whoz da damn snitch ??
dat i shd freakn ditch ...
4 comments:
man this was a good one...
more of like a song..
i dunno wat else to comment..
this is one is real different..
this time evn i cant make a rhym. ...
man this was a hymn..
hymn for someone...
whose known to no one...
i kept mah word ..made a comment...
bt dude this was so differrreeennntttt..
this was unprecedented..
this time u ain't daunted...
Hmmm...seems like eminem is still alive in your life | your heart | your soul. Wait for a surprise buddy.. it will be there for you something new something good.
When someone is so good at expressing themselves through a language. They become obligated to use that language in a correct manner. I loved your poetries and also the way that they do not have a particular rhyming scheme but can still flow so well. You write them just so eloquently that I almost began to imagine myself there. Although, try to use the correct spellings while writing. Even though they weren't done intentionally, but they still give an idea of a person who doesn't respect his/her language. Also, using correct spellings will make them easy to read and understand. :)
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